Week 10 News Journal
PITCHFORK MUSIC FESTIVAL PARIS IS A MASTERCLASS IN AUTUMN STREET STYLE, THE WAY ONLY FRENCH KIDS CAN PULL OF
Katherine Cusumano, October 30, 2016 W Mag (source)
This is a photo gallery about a music festival that took place in Paris at the La Villette. The Pitchfork music festival is a music festival that takes place in Chicago every July. In October, Paris takes a Parisian spin on the music festival. The gallery shows photos of attendees of the festival as well as performers. The photos were shot by Kimberley Ross, who does an amazing job at not only capturing the event but adding a style to the photos that help the viewer feel as though they were at the event. However, while the photos were spectacular, I feel that 100 photos may be too much. The photos start to look like the same thing over and over again after 20 photos. I think they should have chosen just the highlights like the performers and a couple of outfits. W magazine’s audience is normally creative individuals and fashion lovers. Their knowledge of the subject expands beyond that of the general public. While it appears they’re writing for their audience, Cusumano should have elaborated more in the opening paragraph about the venue and its significance. The paragraph felt a little rushed and the sentences did not seem to finish a complete thought.
The Internet Is In Love With This 19-Year-Old “Melanin Goddess”
By Helin Jung, Oct 28,2016 Cosmopolitan (source)
Khoudia Diop is a 19-year-old Senegalese young lady who endured bullying throughout her entire life about her dark skin. Each year Diop worked to build a love for herself and tune out the negativity. Now the internet has gone crazy over her and the former target for bullying is an aspiring model. In this article, Helin Jung talks about Khoudia Diop based on her interview with the Huffington Post and Daily Mail. Jung links the articles within her article, however, the article itself is too short. Jung doesn’t give the reader any new information, the story is already trending as she proves by linking other articles that talked about the exact same thing. Along with the lack of news, Jung overuses quotes that say the same thing multiple times. For example, “as I grew, I learned to love myself more every day, and not pay attention to the negative people, which helped a lot” and “I’ve learned to ignore the negative people and just be a living example of confidence and self-love.” While the sentence and word choice is different, the audience has already learned that she tries to “ignore the negative people” by adding the second quote it makes the statement redundant. Jung should have cut down the second quote to just, “be a living example of confidence and self-love.” The article did not feel effective in informing the audience but rather promoting other articles. There was no different angle taken with this article.
Airbnb Took A Stance Against Discrimination
BY TANYA EDWARDS OCTOBER 29, 2016 Refinery 29 (source)
Airbnb is a company that allows for people to post and rent out their homes to strangers like a bed and breakfast. Airbnb has grown in popular this year mainly for international travelers looking for a more authentic experience. This article discusses Airbnb’s strategy on decreasing discrimination amongst Airbnb users. The company has implemented a new commitment that users , “commit to treat everyone — regardless of race, religion, national origin, ethnicity, disability, sex, gender identity, sexual orientation or age — with respect, and without judgment or bias.” The reason for this is because Airbnb found that users with typically African-American names were being denied more than those with typically White names. Tanya Edwards informs the reader of the answers to the basic who, what, when, where, why, and how questions. Edwards then goes on to make a connection with the study of African American names causing discrimination in the highering process. Edwards takes the article a step forward by making that connect. One thing I believe would have helped to strengthen the article would be actual stories of African-Americans being denied a stay at an Airbnb because of their name.